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My darling

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I know it's tiring,
finding the strength to breathe.
But I pleade to you
don't let go.

I know what it's like,
to want to end everything.
I still hear the screaming;
the unforgettable need
to touch a blade to my skin.

You will be great
because it does get better.

But if you're boarding the train
that never returns
I don't know if I could forgive you.
Wasn't sure about the category :S
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Rakaseth's avatar
Very poingant and touching :( But very good. I especially love the line "But if you're boarding the train that never returns". I feel like the line after that "I don't know if I could forgive you" almost breaks up the flow a bit; I can't really put a finger on it (poetry not my forte >.<) but I think maybe if it was a little shorter it would keep the pace better?

Also "pleade" should be "plead" I think.

:heart: Keep up the good work ^_^